A short story I wrote for school

[Sweeney]

Feel free to leave comments! And I don't care if i made a grammatical mistake

 

 

 

John woke up on the 15th of July, his birthday. His light brown hair was a complete mess, and it was still dark at his little house in Venice. It has been 5 years sine his father disappeared. And today like many of his other birthdays, it would be merely him and his mother Linda. As he rolls out of bed he begins to wonder about his father. This wasn't the first time he thought about him, nor would it be the last. But something about today was different. He hardly knew him because he was always out of the house. And his mother couldn't bring herself to talk about him. He got dressed, washed up, and headed downstairs. As he stumbled down the stairs he realized that his mom had made him an amazing birthday breakfast.

 

* * *

 

âââ¬ÃâHappy birthday Mr. Big 15 year old!!âââ¬Ã Linda said with a smile.

âââ¬ÃâHa, thanks momâââ¬Ã responded John.

âââ¬ÃâUncle Leroy said he was going to stop by laterâââ¬Ã said Linda.

âââ¬ÃâWhy? Heâââ‰â¢s never come to see me on my birthday before.âââ¬Ã Said John.

âââ¬ÃâWell as Iâââ‰â¢m sure you know, heâââ‰â¢s the leader of an infamous group of thieves.âââ¬ÃÂ

âââ¬ÃâYeah, but what does that have to do with me?âââ¬Ã Asked John

âââ¬ÃâEvery five years a new leader is selected for the group. And it would be your fathers turn, but he.... Well you know... So with him gone, your next in line.âââ¬Ã said Linda.

âââ¬ÃâNo I donâââ‰â¢t want to! Iâââ‰â¢m going to make something of my life and show that iâââ‰â¢m not like dadâââ‰â¢s side of the family!âââ¬Ã John said aggravated.

âââ¬ÃâWell weâââ‰â¢ll see what your uncle thinks about that.âââ¬ÃÂ

 

* * *

 

âââ¬ÃâAhhhhhâââ¬ÃÂ, John moaned as he walked back upstairs.

âââ¬ÃâItâââ‰â¢s not fair, I really think I can become a successful person. Iâââ‰â¢m going to sail away to America one day and start a new life. Just because my mom married into a bunch of thieves doesnâââ‰â¢t mean that I have to turn into a criminal like them. Oh well, Im just going to take a nap until uncle Leroy gets here.âââ‰â¢Ã¢ââ¬ÃÂ

 

* * *

 

âââ¬ÃâJoooohhnn!!! Wake up! Leroyâââ‰â¢s hereâââ¬Ã yelled his mom.

âââ¬ÃâUhhhhh....âââ‰â¢Ã¢ââ‰â¢ John mumbles as he rolls out of bed for the second time today.

âââ¬ÃâI donâââ‰â¢Ã¢ââ‰â¢t understand why I have to do this, nothing good is going to come of it.âââ¬Ã John says as he hobbles down the stairs.

âââ¬ÃâHey how are ya?!?âââ¬Ã Leroy asked in his unique voice.

âââ¬ÃâEh, been better.âââ¬Ã said John.

âââ¬ÃâWell arenâââ‰â¢t you just full of spunk.âââ‰â¢Ã¢ââ¬ÃÂcommented Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâI tryâââ¬Ã Said John.

âââ¬ÃâAs you know, Im the leader of a very large group of thievesâââ¬ÃÂ

âââ¬ÃâAnd your the most important person because you decide which bank to rob and who gets hurt.âââ¬ÃÂ

âââ¬ÃâSo why are you here? You haven't talked to me since my dad disappeared.âââ¬Ã John said sternly.

âââ¬ÃâThat's partly why Im here, you see every 5 years....âââ¬ÃÂ

âââ¬ÃâBlah, blah, blah, I know what your going to say.âââ¬Ã Said John even more annoyed.

âââ¬ÃâGood, then you already know you donâââ‰â¢t have a choice. By the way, your present is on the table. Iâââ‰â¢ll see you tomorrow.âââ¬ÃÂ

John walks over to the horribly wrapped present and opens it. A black ski mask, and a pair of black gloves.

 

* * *

 

âââ¬ÃâJohn get up!!! Itâââ‰â¢s time to go see your uncle.âââ¬Ã yelled his mom up the stairs.

Gaaahhhh, I don't want to!âââ¬Ã yelled John.

âââ¬ÃâJust try it and weâââ‰â¢ll talk about it at the end of the day.âââ¬Ã Said his mom in that motherly tone.

âââ¬ÃâFine.âââ¬Ã Said John.

 

* * *

 

After an awkward car ride, John found himself in front of a large abandoned warehouse. He walked through the rickety old doors to a very large room.

âââ¬ÃâHey!!! Look itâââ‰â¢s the new kid John. Are you ready for your fist big robbery??âââ¬Ã asked Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâNope....âââ¬Ã said John.

âââ¬ÃâGreat! I assume you brought my present?âââ¬Ã Asked Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâYeahâââ¬Ã said John.

âââ¬ÃâGood lets get moving!!âââ¬Ã said Leroy.

 

* * *

 

âââ¬ÃâOk, so here is the plan, I keep everyone still with the gunâââ¬Ã Started Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâAnd I come in and take all the money?âââ¬Ã Asked john.

âââ¬ÃâEx-actamundo!!âââ¬Ã said Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâDo me a favor?âââ¬Ã asked John.

âââ¬ÃâWhat?âââ¬Ã Asked Leroy.

âââ¬ÃâNever ever say that again.âââ¬Ã said John.

 

* * *

 

Leroy storms into the bank, gun in hand.

âââ¬ÃâEVERYONE DOWN!!!âââ¬Ã He screams.

Then John stumbles in behind him, ashamed to be there. But before he gets to the register, he notices and familiar face.

âââ¬ÃâD..D...Dad??âââ¬Ã John stammers.

âââ¬ÃâJohn!! Quick come with me.âââ¬Ã Johnâââ‰â¢s dad said.

They quickly rushed out the backdoor of the bank into the dark gross alley.

âââ¬ÃâDad where have you been? I have so many questions.âââ¬Ã said John.

âââ¬ÃâDonâââ‰â¢t worry son there will be plenty of time on the boat.âââ¬Ã said Johns father

âââ¬ÃâThe boat?âââ¬Ã John said with a smile.

 

 

 

 

I thought it was ok, i've written better.

[fattwam]

that was actually pretty good , you should make a part 2

[subs_55]

i dont know it was ok but i dont know it had some blah vibe coming from it. no offence, i mean it, the no offence part i mean . keep writing storys though its a nice thing to get into doing as a hobby.